"Be quiet, no one cares." declared Rachel.
"I am bigger and stronger than you. So we can fight right now if you want."said Allison
"Just because I got the last piece of cake does not mean you can be mean to me" stated Rachel.Then their Mom walked in.
"Why are you two fighting, it is 10 at night just go to bed." she said
"Because she took the last piece when I called it."said Allison
"I do not care who called it. If you two do not go to bed right now, you are both grounded."
"Fine. Whatever" Allison stated angerly.
Clark, I like your post. It has a very personal meaning to you because it happened in your own home. I think it could have been more than dialogue, and gave some background information. But keep up the good work !!!
ReplyDeleteClark, your narrative sounds like a familiar sibling fight, and I can definitely believe it is based on a real life event. Work on your punctuation here. If a sentence continues after a quotation, use a comma instead of a period at the end of the quotation.
ReplyDeleteThis makes me laugh. I can relate to this because I get in sibling fights all the time. The youngest always win. I liked this post a lot, keep up the good work.
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